Teachers notes

I have now been through my rough silent film through with my teacher. His notes were:
- The beginning sequence when the girls are driving in the car is too long and to try and shorten it down to about 25 - 30 seconds.
- The begining of the sequecne is also very rocky and dis-orientating
- The text in the titles is too bold and modern
- The text is vague as to what is happening within the scene
- There are several blinks on the titles
- There could be more close-up shots of the girls faces to make it more direct
- The titles that say 'bitching' has to be changed to sound more sophisticated
- The tranistion between music tracks could be smoother and lead into eachother more

I then went and made changes to the film itself making the tranistions smoother and also adding in soe more effects to make the film seem more intense.

Final Film Review

Audience feedback

Questionnaire analysis

Music choice

As I have been working on a silent movie teh music is the most important factor in the maing of this short film. I wanted to create emotion through the music as the dialogue has been taken away, this then made me think about the music in more depth.
For the introduction to my short film i ahve chosen a track called :
'Attention Everyone' ironic as the introduction of the film is souly for grabbing the attention of the audience watching it. This music track has a number of musical instruments all contributing to the one triumohant track. The mix of drums, saxaphone and trombone gives the acid jazz feel to the beginning of the movie which is similar to the music that would have been in 1920's silent films.
The next song that i chose was called:
'Mr five by five' this is 

Audience feedback questionnaire

Audience Questionnaire

How do you feel about the music accompanying my short film?

(1)   Went well with the action

(2)   It could have been better

(3)   It didn’t work with the piece

Why do you think this?

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Did you want to be led to the murderer through the storyline?

Yes [ ]      No [ ]

Would you rather the murderer been un masked at the end?

Yes [ ]      No [ ]

Did the effects suffice would you rather have seen more dust and scratches over the material?

Yes [ ]      No [ ] 

Was the storyline easy to follow?

Yes [ ]      No [ ]

Would you say this has changed your views on silent movies?

Yes [ ]     No [ ]

 I have created this questionnaire to get some better feedback instead of friends commneting on facebook saying that it was 'really good'. I ahve however got some useful feedback from facebook. This questionaire specifies the information I need to know to make get some ctrical feedback both good and bad to see how effective my short film was on my targett audience of 16- 25 year olds.

I wanted to know if their opinions had changed on shrot films and when given a stroyline about modern teenagers and the dangers of alcohol and seeing this on screen maybe openined up a new demogrpahic of silent films being based in 2012 so that the youth of today can relate to the narrative and make it easier for them to understand.

Film review research

This magazine review has many features I could use for my film review the dvd front cover with various bits of information in a bitesize format make this film review seem more digestible to the mass audience. A screen shot from the film iself creates the background for this review it also has bright lighting which attracts the audiences attentiona dn directs them to the white text mixed with a bold yellow text to further attract the audiences attention. The picture although shows what the movie is generally about is very vague and lees the audience guessing and making assumptions as to why she is weraing a red A on a black corset.

This film review's techniques are fvery well laid out as they have positioned their writing in a way that doesn't make the audience feel swamped with information but bitesize paragraphs.

 This magazine review has a predominatley white background with a dull picture with blacks, whites but no colours that burst out at the audience and attract their attention. However the positioning of the screen shot makes it easier to break up the information and also gives them a sense of what the movie is going to be about especailly since yet agin jack sparrow has hit trouble this leaves the audience questioning the movie and leaving them wanting to know why he is again in trouble.

Again a very dull background however the text is split into columns which presents the audience with a basic guideline as to where to focus their attention to. The screen shot positioned at the side of the film review lets the audience read the texdt with no break then the picture at the right of the age to then break focus and have something to look at.

Final poster

This is my fuinal poster as in the 1920's the posters were very simplistic and didn't have a lot of tect or images to show what film and what genre it was. I ahve positioned the picture in the centre of the page with everyone with monontonous facial expressions with only one person smiling, This shows how naive she is comapared to her firends this also connotes conflict within the film itslef.

The text is similar to the handwriting sterotypically used in the time period of silent moveis. The text is also flowing and neat which connotes a sense mystery within the text. This film is about reading between the lines and interpreting the action.

Second inital poster idea

I thought this poster was efective in gaining the simplistic effect on the pster and how it would ahve been premiered in the 1920's. However I feel that the blood at the top of the bottle makes the poster seem very cliche and this is not the type of feedback I wanted to hear from the audeicne. Although I like the murderer being behind the bottle this gives away the narrative of the film and therefor people wouldn't bother watching the film to see who they killer was and try and find some common gorund and relation between themselves and the storyline.

The 'evidence written on the bottle also gives away the agenda of the bottle and the intentions in this moveis however I like the idea of the bottle to give a certain vagueness to the piece and leave the audience guessing why the bottle is so important that it is center in the poster.

Poster initial ideas

  

The red on the bottle gives of a certain sense of cliche nad that it is fiollowing the narrative of a genric horror movie having gore on the poster and giving off a the dennotation of death and loss within the piece. 

I l;ike how I have positioned the faces of all the characters however this then makes the poster look over complicated and busy and that there is too much to focus on and not enough simplisity. I can argue that I ahve made my poster postmodern as I am following the genreic guidelines for the mass adueicen making them a lazy society and not presenting them with enough detail or questionioing the poster and making it easy for them to interpret.