suffolk murder music version.mp4

This is the musical version of my short film. The music I have chosen to accompnay my short film is the genre's:
- Acid Jazz
- Blues
- Jazz
These are all old types of music style and as I wanted to keep some of the genric codes and conventions of a 1920's silent movie but modernize it to suit the expectations of youth in 2012.
The opneing of my short film at the moment laswts for nearly 50 seconds this is a fifth of my short film already dedicated to my opening. The iopening of my film starts in a car connoting how happy the firensds are together with no influence of alcohol or other friends casuing distress amoung the group.
I like the car scnes although the are too prolonged and very jumpy and rocky camera shots which makes the eyes focus on too many things with the cast names coming up on screen at the same time it may make the audience feel queezy this could also jepordise the rest of the film as I am trying to change youth's opinions to give silent films an chance.
The first house scene I thought was very effective however there is no close-ups or ways to show who the firends are actually bitching about it leaves a vague interpreation for the audience this is later on resolved as you see the character leave the room and sit on her own.
The title that comes up telling the audience that it is 'later that evening' jumps a bit and is quite a messy finish, this is something I will have to look at and makes sure that the timings are exact.
The use of shots are a good veriety even though a few close-ups could be added to further show the confilct between the characters.
The music I feel complimetns the the action ion screen althought the transitions could be made smotther and have each track lead into another and change the audiences feeling towards the next scene.
The movie up to this point has been sped up to 130% making the body language and movemetns seem bigger and bolder. However in the murder scene I ahve slowed the action down to 70% making the action seem more anxious nad have more of an effect on the audience. The point where the murderer lifts the bottle seems less effective than I wanted it to be, whilst I was filming I wanted to have the action chopping and changing into different parts of the death.
The titles within the piece could ahve been better presented as the corner designs are slightly off screen, and the text is too bold for the naivveity i was trying to create. The text written on the titles is also vague and doesn't lead the audiecne into thinking about the situation.