The script

i made three separate scripts even though there is to be no dialogue i wanted to make a script so that my actors and actresses could work alongside it and be able to act.

Script 1 -
In this script there was hardly any stage directions and too much waffle it was taking a long time to get to the point of the story and wasting time. Also as Drinka is our victim having her at the beginning of the piece would slow things down. Although a lot happens in the script it was very dry and the way the script was panning out I was finding it harder to fit everything in under the five minutes alloted time.
  Moreover as Drinka is in the beginning the audience would have time to judge her but then I thought about it and decided that it would be better to show her later on in the film so they will get the view of the other characters so their characteristics can shine through.

Script 2 -
The second draft was pretty much the same although this is where I started to develop my ideas. I switched some words around and played about with the script to make it more vague and mysterious and not tell the audience who the killer is and eave it as sort of a blank page. This way the characters could be left very vague as well however their characteristics will be shown when I start filming and editing. At the beginning of the short film I wanted to make it apparent who was what but at the same time leave a lot of un-answered questions.

Script 3 -
With this version of my script I feel that there is a real mystery and get's the audience engaged with who actually committed the deed. I have included more stage directions so that when i start filming i have a clear image in my head of what I want it to look like. As this is a silent movie the script won't be heard but it gives me and the actors a stable foundation for the piece itself. This script definitely allows the actors to be able to act well with the words which is where I think I lacked in script one and two.
   Lastly this script reveals the murder but instead of just making it known to the audience by the character being dragged out we have a flashback of the death. To me this makes it more apparent to the audience what exactly happened and the reason behind the murder.

Throughout the stages of making these three scripts I think I have improved the way I write for characters and how to make a script engaging and following a storyline. Although all three scripts were well written I think that when writing a script it has to be engaging and thorough so the audience knows whats going on especially with a silent movie. You have to show a personality through words which was probably one of the hardest things with my project.